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Bumble bees
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Not the poem which we have read, but that to which we return, with the greatest pleasure, possesses the power and claims the name of essential poetry.

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by Huni

Would you mind leaving this as a message on my phone, you've put me in a daydream mood!!

Great haiku

Alex :-)

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: August 17, 2004 )

bees Alex
My head was buzzing and my temperature was WAY up so I actually thought I replied to this. Sorry.
With my Aussie accent Alex, I don't think so! You are welcome to use it, lol, so glad it gave you good feelings. To everyone for those lovely scores, wow, thank-you. huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: August 21, 2004 )

And I could use this as a ring-back for my cellphone! LOL! Oh, I love your collection Huni, and now, Bumblebees? I like the smart third line, Gypsy!

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: August 21, 2004 )

Thanks Peter
You are funny (but your avatar looks grumpy - what has happened, a new tough Peter eh?) thank you for stopping by, this has to be a favourite one of mine. You must have a great grasp of English - as you seem to 'get' even the most obscure references. not that the last line was that obscure ~wink~. huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: August 21, 2004 )

shadow boxing
huni, you have an amazing capacity for observing familiar things in a fresh and startling way - I suppose keen observation is the essence of haiku, and you have it in bucket-loads. nice one.

( Posted by: sahelsteve [Member] On: August 23, 2004 )

From very small I have keenly watched everything, especially nature. That and being just a tad different in my thinking helps. lol. thanks steve, warmest regards, huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: August 23, 2004 )

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