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Walking in phases, or so it may seem, looking through these eyes. I struggle to keep a hold but reality constantly slips through my fingers, detaches from my perception and becomes my enemy. There are distortions as far as my eye can see: a faded blue and white fuzzy sea slipping into a drain in the sky, a gravity-well to consume us all. An apocalyptic backwards fall, under the debris we still may crawl. I place my hand out to the vision to make sure it’s not real but maybe I”M not cause I’m not sure I can feel.


In an unfamiliar place, I stare into another face while walking an anxious pace. What secrets does beauty conceal? What jewels can innocent hands steal? What fierce predator becomes a meal? I am me, but am I real?


In the distance I can see you fading away only to return with a different face. I am unsure of my coordinations along the grid of this plane of my existence. No use to guess, foolish to predict. I know for sure there lingers a dark and potent cloud above my head, stuck on me like a curse, the curse of life, which like a scar, is always there to remind me of my existence and when it’s in my head it constantly fills my head with reasons to hate myself. I can see it when I look into the mirror and I know it’s not me I’m staring at. My existence may only be my own hallucination and the substance is the god of my own intoxicated reality, where everything is real but me.

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-RanE-
DEATH IS OUR ONLY SALVATION


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The following comments are for "“Magick Vision”"
by viewsocruel

magick vision
I like this piece very much. It's an excellent reflection of feeling, that most humans can relate to at one point or another.

I am me, but am I real?

Very good question for anyone to ask themselves. Very well done. What I would like to see is more comprehensive line breaks. I think it would give this poem better readability and more punch. Overall, good job.

( Posted by: mzjen1 [Member] On: August 18, 2004 )





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