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Uncoupled


for my numb
is beyond bare bearable being boring

and your sweetness
drives me meek making miserable mess

Love detaching lines
words we cannot connect in a Verse



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The following comments are for "Uncoupled"
by Idomis

Short and Sweet
Idomis;
This is short and sweet, I love it...and as always, you always come through with [great] choice of words...Excellent job!

Blessings,
{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: August 13, 2004 )

Idomis - Uncoupled
Alliteration is something I didn't have a gift to do in poetry. I like this one and I agree with Claire.

Beautiful and sweet...

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: August 13, 2004 )

Agree with Angry Pete..
and the others, I like the alliteration (we call it letter-rhyming, did not know the english term) adds a good effect to the poem. Well, here you make complicated thinking about love seem simple and straightforward. I have heard much about your writing, and now I see your obvious talent give the rumours substance. I will check out the other poems of yours when I have the time. cheers

( Posted by: DrKilldare [Member] On: August 14, 2004 )

a little of everything
Thanks all for your thoughts.

( Posted by: idomis [Member] On: August 18, 2004 )





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