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You, unknowing and invisible
dwell inside of me.

I stalk you with my mind
Tracing down your nose
outlining your lovely mouth.
My thoughts feather
across your heart
and slip down over your
flat soft belly
to linger awhile,

resting gently on the waves
of your breathing.



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Not the poem which we have read, but that to which we return, with the greatest pleasure, possesses the power and claims the name of essential poetry.


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The following comments are for "You"
by Huni

Huni-You
Lots of very good poems today, Huni! Most of them challenge the mind. And this one, Huni, required me to use my sixth sense LOL to be able to appreciate it more, and I always loved doing it. The first line is what entranced me, 'You, unknowing and invisible/dwell inside of me'... your affection for the person here is ethereal. I love it Huni!

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: August 12, 2004 )

Peter thanks
Ethereal. Oh! I love that word. Thank-you, your comment warms me. huni

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: August 12, 2004 )

The feathered touch...
I like the soft slow pace. You want to take you time to read and enjoy this one. Very sensual.

( Posted by: BMartinez [Member] On: August 12, 2004 )

i like it!
I like it Huni...its beauty speaks of lovers' siesta...perhaps an aftermath of passion...

( Posted by: Shakti [Member] On: August 15, 2004 )

MMM,
Huni, this is a sweet read. I found the sensuality of this poem~~~~like riding waves of desire.....delicious.

Darlene

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: August 15, 2004 )

Goodness - thank you all
BMartin, I loved that you went slow, that's how it come. Thank-you windchime, I love your perspective, I wish I could say it belonged to me. Shakti, it means a lot to me that you got it, you did exactly. Dar, your comment is poetry in it self thank-you. huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: August 20, 2004 )

hi
thanks for your comment on my poem i like this poem!!kisses xxx-tabita-xxx

( Posted by: tabita [Member] On: August 25, 2004 )





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