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Though my passion for you grows evíry day,
Tis like a dried river to my parched lips,
My words ill spoken, my heart doth betray,
My hidden dependence for thirstful sips.
This love for you, to which I hold no doubt,
Leads me to a dangerous temptation,
You are the rain to my forsaken drought,
And to you I turn tíwards for salvation.
Twas for you to take, my heart thou didst steal,
I mustnít show my true feelings of lust,
Look past what I show and feel what I feel,
This poem speaks but of its outer crust.
Tis up to you to break my wretched spell,
See true my love, release me from this hell.



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The following comments are for "A Sonnet"
by Ilan Bouchard

thanks
Thank you for your comment. I also love Shakespeare, you could say he's my inspiration towards lots of my poetry.

( Posted by: Ilan Bouchard [Member] On: August 13, 2004 )

*blush*
But I must say you flatter me. Glad you enjoyed it.

( Posted by: Ilan Bouchard [Member] On: August 13, 2004 )

Ilan Bouchard - Sonnet
I, too, liked this. I love the rhyming and the way you fit the lines to measure up with the meter, I just find perfect. Meter was what I often try to avoid, it messes up my poem, but this, this is made even beautiful by the measurements in lines. Though the topic may have been common, it's been made unique by the form and choice of words. I am giving this a ten.

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: August 13, 2004 )





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