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"A storm is coming," she says
Looking into my eyes instead of
Up at the skies where the
Clouds are circumstantial, the sun
Half visible, unsure in its own
Sincerity. A storm is due, I know,
But where it blow from
And when it will come,
I cannot tell, even though her eyes
Dispel doubt and rebuild it anew.
Perhaps I saw her lip quiver
As the nimbus darkens and
Tumbles into a new version of
Itself, that was hidden before.
"A storm is coming" she says to me
And squeezes my hand to let me
Know which side she wants to be on.


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The following comments are for "A Storm Is Coming"
by False Dawn

False Dawn - Storm
Beautiful! The first one I read from you, and you caught me here with such a passionate and sensual piece. I like its subtle enticement, and the weather outside as background, making the line 'A storm is coming' even sexier.

I fully enjoyed. ;D

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: August 10, 2004 )

Storms
FD;
Welcome back...Missed your postings, I enjoyed this alot..I Loved the [12th] and [13th] line. Excellent read!

Blessings,
{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: August 10, 2004 )

Stormy Weather
Hey Jeannie, nice to see you again. Hope you've been keeping well.

I think this and my other piece need a little more explaining in terms of context - in my time away from here, I've become suitably more romantic, hence why a lot of my poems are now going to be more sensual than before.

Thanks for the comments guys.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: August 10, 2004 )

eye of the storm
False Dawn, it's good to read you again :)
This is a lovely poem which I enjoyed very much. You've got some killer lines:
"As the nimbus darkens and
Tumbles into a new version of
Itself, that was hidden before"
wonderfully woven...great read
Reba

( Posted by: Reba [Member] On: August 10, 2004 )

I loved this
well, what can I say. You are a master. This is great! I loved the ending, how sure it was in the midst of all this confusion.

( Posted by: Serendipity [Member] On: August 11, 2004 )





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