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fog enshrouds
two crows on a wire
grief in threes


"I place these moments in my pocket
to be pulled
at the rush of noon,
the crush of three...
when tears come,
when words must learn to be enough..." MKL

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The following comments are for "waiting crows haiku"
by Serenem

birds of giref
unintentionally, you arrived at the symbolism that many, including Edagr Allan Poe tried to explore by writing about ravens:

"And the Raven, never flitting, still is sitting,
still is sitting,
On the pallic bust of Pallas just above my chamber door;
And his eyes have all the seeming of a demon's that is dreaming..."

Crows, too, eat dead flesh, and hearld grief.
An interesting haiku.

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: August 16, 2004 )

hey, tef! Unintentional?

But was it unintentional?


You hit on the exact meaning that I was striving for!

( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: August 16, 2004 )

lil' bugger posted before I was finished!
Heeee heeee!

Sorry about that!

Anyway, I'm so glad that you 'got' this, Teflon! I thought the lack of response was because -- well it stunk-- or no one understood the image I was going for!

Bad news and death come in threes and we have two crows waiting...

A real life image that inspired the poem came after recieving two items of bad news a few weeks ago.

Thanks for reading this, Tef!



( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: August 16, 2004 )

Your #1 Fan
No prob. Meanwhile, what about your cat haiku quota? Fer-got aboutthat?

( Posted by: teflon [Member] On: August 16, 2004 )

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