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On my couch I had a brilliant thought
While watching Gilligan and smoking pot*
Should I write it down or not?
That would entail my leaving this spot
Skipper is definitely overwrought
Did I lock the door? Don't want to get caught!
How long have we been here? What time have you got?
Where did they get mattresses for their cots?
Does coconut cream ever rot?
Ouch, my fingertips are getting hot
Oh yeah...my brilliant thought
All I have is a Marks-a-Lot
It doesn't matter because I already forgot.

*I do not smoke pot but IF I ever did in the late eighties or early nineties, I did not inhale!



------
Amy Corless


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The following comments are for "My Brilliant Thought"
by arc

Amy-the non-pot smoking mom
Nah, you make me doubt your disclaimer with your very good piece! LOL. I like the rhymes, while reading the first few lines I thought ahead 'hah! she's gonna run out of rhymes!' but you didn't! ;D Well done Amy!

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: August 5, 2004 )

a fine piece
I don't know what to say but I like it a lot. The stuff does seem to have something against brain cells, doesn't it? You remind me of my mom, who recently re-took up the practice.

( Posted by: seanspacey [Member] On: August 6, 2004 )

seanspacey
What are you doing over here? You never read my stuff! Do you like it/me or hate it/me? I can't tell if you're mean or nice. I'm glad you read it!! I haven't re-taken up the practice but it was fun back then. What are you all about,really?

( Posted by: arc [Member] On: August 6, 2004 )

I DID NOT exHALE
I couldn't help but think of Sean's rant when I read this. I really enjoyed this piece, and I am doubly impressed if you've really never been high. It also reminded me of the movie PCU: "I didn't exhale."

Jason

( Posted by: eleutheromaniac [Member] On: August 6, 2004 )

munchies
a classy account of munchies. Very realistic, because I inhaled...

( Posted by: Teflon [Member] On: August 6, 2004 )

arc........
I really liked this!! You always have a slight sense of humour about you that makes me laugh.

Alex :-)

P.S. I think Sean like vivacious blondes *hint hint* LOL

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: August 6, 2004 )

Hey Little Buddy
What's that smell? Gilligan and pot . . reminds me of a Jimmy Buffet concert.
Funny piece. - Carl

** I must go back and see if 'this couch' character is in all of your work. Ice cream, pot . . . Humm "The Painter of Light" . . . "The Poet of Life On Couch"

( Posted by: cjmiller [Member] On: August 6, 2004 )

cottonmouth
Amy~

As someone who didn't exhale... I'm not sure I understand this is anything but theory but it was definately a pleasure to read. You have wit and humor and spades and as always I'm impressed by how far your work has come in a short time...

If you'll excuse me I'm off to get a big glass of water and some Soft Batch cookies.

Bart

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: August 6, 2004 )

Tina.Claire,Bart,Teflon and all
I think I struck a chord with you "artist" types!! Dude, Where's my Soft Batch? Thank you all for visiting this poem.

( Posted by: arc [Member] On: August 6, 2004 )

stone soup
This got me all choked up, and then I had to relight. I like the bit about not exhaling, particularly at current prices.

I suppose I could even watch Gilligan's Island reruns, if the mood is mellow enough. Thanks for lighting/lightening the atmosphere.

john

( Posted by: johnlibertus [Member] On: August 6, 2004 )

Arc's Brilliance
Arc, I love reading you. Your humor is so light and just you. It even shines through in your comments! This was very good.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: August 8, 2004 )

in comment
to your last comment on my site. you totally missed the point, you were supposed to join the battle, not tell me in prose what you thought about my rhyme, because that has no interest

( Posted by: shapeshifter [Member] On: August 18, 2004 )

my dear
i don't know you
so why should i want to disrespect you?
we battle, we don't argue, it's a lyrical showoff, and the more shit you say about me, in rhymes, the happier you make me. it's a form, a style, and I'l never give you credit while battling. And, btw, I'm as new to this form as you are.

( Posted by: shapeshifter [Member] On: August 20, 2004 )

well, you know, he's working hard these days
madmen all around him, could stress out even the best, i.e me
I'm not online at home, and dreaming up these rhymes when I'm on an internet cafe is just too pricy. I'll send you a link to some of my music soon

( Posted by: shapeshifter [Member] On: August 22, 2004 )

Hey Arc
Well I guess it was only a matter of time until we'd be in touch too, Arc. If I may, since I'm still a relative neophyte here, what does Arc stand for? And just so you know, all this about the butt-kissing is all in good fun. But what did you mean about the high price of that real estate?

( Posted by: Odysseus [Member] On: August 24, 2004 )

arc
arc, i think i love you. but not if i have to keep calling you arc. arc. ahem! arc,arc. no, see? anyway, thank you for looking at my little rhyming things; it took me a regrettably long time to look at your poetry, but now i'm so glad i did. you're a bloody littl' treasure, is what you are. do you think - i mean between the two of us working together, working hard - we can cancel out a coupla bush votes? well, we'll chat at the next "all hat/no cattle" meeting. bye! and a big smooch, you talented thang!

j

( Posted by: mercer102 [Member] On: September 4, 2004 )

She didn't Inhale? HA HA HA!
Sounds like a lot of "pot talk" to me, lol!

( Posted by: DieBaronHobskewward [Member] On: September 22, 2004 )

That was...
FUN....Flashbacks...

( Posted by: Bobby7L [Member] On: December 25, 2004 )





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