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Let not the light from thine eyes
Wither at the sight of me.
I am but thy humble servant.

Cast about in darkness would I
If harm would come to thee from me
I grovel at thy feet.

Lashed upon my wicked skin
Lest but a single touch mar thy silk
I am craven incarnate.

Wrought with fear beneath my breast
At the thought of thy leave taking.
I am nothing without thee.

"See the man with the lonely eyes, oh, take his hand, you'll be surprised." Supertramp.

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The following comments are for "Craven"
by nauticus66

I Like...
The Language and it's connotations...

Rather like Shakespeare...

Very Well Done...

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: August 5, 2004 )

I hope I know how to write in the same form. and this is so much like a scene from Beauty and the Beast with the accuracy in choice of words. I love this very very much...

(so many good posts today, Claire, don't you think so?)

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: August 6, 2004 )

Thank you
Thank you all for your kind comments. I am glad you enjoyed my little piece here :O) It's fun to try different styles.

( Posted by: nauticus66 [Member] On: August 6, 2004 )

Thanks for all the nice comments guys, you guys are great. I'm presently having a terrible time with the internet out here on the rig so please bear with me :O).

( Posted by: nauticus66 [Member] On: August 7, 2004 )

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