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I've never felt this was
and it's a feeling that I
cannot explain
cause when you look me in my eyes
I see something so unexplainable

I invision that night
everything was perfect
and it was just like in the movies
you take me in your arms and
I'll play the part of
the girl who's stolen your heart

... everything was quiet
nothing but the waves
and the murmered voices, telling us we're perfect
drowned out by the sound of our hearts
beating faster, they started beating faster
and I knew
this was where I wanted to be
lying right here beside you
it's just you and me
and we can finally be free


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by B*Dizzle

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