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Bound in your fatal covers, you are my bliss not yet my sin
You've given me choice, and I wish not to leave the ruin you've lured me in

I'm filled with panic, but my fear to falter overgrows my fear of death,
And tears of mixed feelings they form as I fight to take my final breath

As you slowly rise, so cold you were covering every inch of my skin
So drowsy I was, I shut my eyes, and the drugs were quick to kick in

And the pain in my chest just faded away as I gradually fell asleep
And as the water was covering the tip of my head to the other side I'd taken a leap



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The following comments are for "water's serenity"
by seniorme

Serenity
Short, strong, well written. Very powerful and effective. I love the beginning, "Bound in your fatal covers, you are my bliss not yet my sin
You've given me choice, and I wish not to leave the ruin you've lured me in". Very true!!! Were you thinking of me when you wrote this? An instant favorite.

( Posted by: Serendipity [Member] On: August 6, 2004 )

seniorme....
This is very powerful, your structure compliments the subject so well and held me until the end.

Alex :-)

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: August 7, 2004 )

serendipity and londongrey
thanx to both of you, it took me alot of effort and time to write this one, although it's not that long!!

( Posted by: seniorme [Member] On: August 7, 2004 )





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