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sweet summer lilac
brushes the laundry basket
as she comes and goes

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Not the poem which we have read, but that to which we return, with the greatest pleasure, possesses the power and claims the name of essential poetry.


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The following comments are for "Laundry day"
by Huni

Wonderful Claire,
I love that you take so much time to comment Claire, you are such a good writer and so busy and here you are again. Saying good, meaningful things to me. This beautiful tree grows like a bridal bower over my back door. It always catches my breathe and imagination as I walk under it to hang out washing. Thank you so much. huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: August 10, 2004 )

lilac
i love lilac---its one my mother's favorite smells... Claire is right- it brings back beautiful memories.. I can imagine you hanging your washing...the tree catching pieces of sunlight reflected on your skin...beautiful imagery

( Posted by: shakti [Member] On: August 10, 2004 )

laundry day, huni
Omg! Somebody slap me, please! I have the strangest desire to do laundry!
Very well done, Huni, not many people can inspire me this way, believe you me.

( Posted by: mzjen1 [Member] On: August 11, 2004 )

shakti, jen,windchime.
Thanks everyone for stopping by. Jen you crack me up, windchime, is it sexy enough for the ad. men? lol. Shakti, thank for saying something of mine is beautiful, from you that is special. huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: August 11, 2004 )

laundry day
I agree with the other comments here - Huni, this is a really good haiku. I read it six times and liked it each time!

( Posted by: sahelsteve [Member] On: August 12, 2004 )

lilacs and laundry
Huni, you took this right from my childhood! We had a lilac bush right next to our clothesline!


Huni, this is FABULOUS haiku. Period.


I love what you write, dear...

Melinda



( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: August 12, 2004 )

Melinda/steve
I must be tired because both your comments have made me weepy. Thank you so much. Just finishing my thread poem, wishing I had more time and this comes in. I needed it. Ta! huni

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: August 12, 2004 )

lilacs
Splendid haiku - personal yet "detached" at the same time.

One thing: in my neck of the woods, lilacs bloom in spring time and are no longer flowering in summer. If this is also true in your neck of the woods, perhaps "sweet spring lilacs" would do just as well.

The fact that someone still hangs laundry in the yard is refreshing.

The fact that your haiku brought back memories to several commenters tells me there are not enough lilac bushes/trees in the world. Get busy people and plant!

( Posted by: gomarsoap [Member] On: August 12, 2004 )

sunner lilac gomar
Thank you for your great comments. My mother calls it a summer lilac. It is in fact a budlia, another kind of small tree/shrub. It hangs like a bower of gorgeous sweet, honey smelling flowers, in our winter can you believe!! Why it's called summer lilac I'll never know. warm regards gomar, huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: August 12, 2004 )

Lilac
You can almost smell the laundry. Great Haiku!

( Posted by: EverybodyElsesGirl [Member] On: August 12, 2004 )

summer lilacs
the fresh smell of laundry on the line, flowering plants, olfactory nuance,
anybody for a picnic?
Thanks Huni!

( Posted by: Lionel Gizik [Member] On: August 19, 2004 )

Everyb'sgirl & Lionel G
Hello to you both, thank you for the great comments, they mean a lot. huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: August 20, 2004 )





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