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You are the real.
Passion, sadness,
the erotic innocence.
A new strength,
fresh out of the box.
Not weary or vacant.
The wan smile is gone,
replaced, forevermore.
There is a sexy smile.
The sensuous spread
of lips, a nascent, delicious grin.
And hidden in the voice
a smooth, cool embrace.
There, within it's timbre
a sweet childlike melody,
that heals old wounds
and calms the storms
that rage within.
In you, this new incarnation,
a determined sense
of ultimate purpose,
of a revealed truth.
I feel inspired,
in touch with the new life
held in the sweet glances
as you read into me
between the lines
and find the hints
of an imagined perfected reality
you are, to put simply,
everything and anything.
And in that duality,
Perfect.



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The following comments are for "You Are (Who Are You?)"
by BMartinez

imagined perfected reality...
I never like to reread my poems or edit them because I am always wanting to change things. The only thing on this poem that was changed I think was the title. Very glad to see that you enjoyed this poem.

( Posted by: BMartinez [Member] On: August 9, 2004 )

Always wanted to visit Texas...
Thanks Claire. I think I am really getting the hang of the site and I love the feedback I have gotten thus far. Thank you so much for making me feel welcome.

( Posted by: BMartinez [Member] On: August 9, 2004 )

Pace
Good pace, got that exciting feel to it as if it's tripping over itself to get into your head.

( Posted by: False Dawn [Member] On: August 9, 2004 )

Tripping the Script
At least when you read it now there is no tripping but there was plenty of stumbling when trying to put the finishing touches on this one...

( Posted by: bmartinez [Member] On: August 10, 2004 )

bmartinez....
An original love poem!!! I normally read love poems and think, hmmmmm, read it before, but this was very diverse and powerful.

Great!!

Alex :-)

( Posted by: Londongrey [Member] On: August 11, 2004 )

Original Love poem
Thanks Alex. Thats one of the nicest compliments I think I have ever received. Though everyone I have met on this site has been especially generous.
Glad you enjoyed it.

( Posted by: BMartinez [Member] On: August 12, 2004 )





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