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BuT I Can't StoP ThEsE TeaRs FroM FalLing.
I Can't StoP My SmiLe FroM FaiDing.
I wAnt YoU To TakE My HanD,
Tell ME EvEryThiNg Is OkAy.
I'm SicK of THis NOTHinGNeSs EvEryDay!
WHaT Is ThiS NonSenSe ThaT has ocCurREd?
Why Do yoU Say ThoSe ThinGs That I havE heaRd?
I aPpoliGiZed CouNtLEss Times, I AlwaYs TakE The BLame!
I'm SicK oF The FacE LoOkiNg BaCk.
I'm TirEd Of ThE ShAme.


AbBy

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~*Abigail*~


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hELp
i like the way you formatted this poem. i liked the crying and breathing gulps and sobs.

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: August 3, 2004 )

nice
yeah i liked this poem. the whole feeling was good but i think th way ppl write LiKE tHiS makes it hard to read......just a thougth but it does rota compliment the poem's feeling

( Posted by: bballgrl [Member] On: August 3, 2004 )

Abby-Help
Some kind of experiment in your part, huh? I think you're trying to make us look at it like it were a sobbing, yes, the letters are like sobbing. I agree with Claire, but the adventurous side of me enjoyed the variance. Please post some more of your poems.

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: August 4, 2004 )

help.
If your poem is strong enough it will stand on its own without the need of gimmicks, which is all the erratic use of capitalization in this piece amounts to.

The content didn't do anything for me. It is very self-centered, in my opinion.

( Posted by: die_daily [Member] On: August 4, 2004 )

Help
I think the typing style looks like a ransom note ! This would seem to fit with the plea for freedom from shame and guilt.

( Posted by: arc [Member] On: August 4, 2004 )





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