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Above this river you now run,
__I pray,

is a clear and cloudless canopy,
stretched taut and smooth, from edge
to edge, where every day dawns soft
with symphonies of morning birds
and woven strands of purest light.
__I follow

you along this final, soothing course,
let go... let go...
repose your weary spirit,
no longer do you need to bravely row
against rushing currents; lie back--
let your hand trail
in the coolness of forever.
__I reach,

I feel, our fingers touch
in love that grows stronger, still,
even as you drift away. This river washes
pain from love, erases scars from hearts
and skin, sifts the silt from gold.
Do not be troubled, dear, for tears
are never wasted; each one a drop of rain
which adds to the river's flow, to bring
you gently home.
__I breathe

a sigh, so long and deep, release
sorrow to become your guiding star
as this restful current eases you
beyond my wistful, adoring sight.
Float peacefully on, joy refreshed
and bathed in amazing light; see clearly,
friend, my loving smile,
my waving hand, and
__I know

the destination
that calls you, now,
is not so far away,
__it's there,
where your heart is waiting,

__only this riverís bend
___________________from here.

Author's Note:

This poem has certain lines indented-- the only way I could make this work was to use the underline______________! Please try to visualize it without the lines! LOL

"I place these moments in my pocket
to be pulled
at the rush of noon,
the crush of three...
when tears come,
when words must learn to be enough..." MKL

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The following comments are for "This River"
by Serenem

this river
this makes me want to go down and buy a rubber raft and take off. oooooooohs & aaaaaaahs for lines. this is refreshing-- liked third stanza best of all. is this a construct or an Olson stream of thought written at a sitting. Just wondering. good write, charlie.

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: August 3, 2004 )

this river, willhill
Hello, charlie!

After the very sad week I've had, it's good to be able to get back into and especially nice to 'see' you here on this new poem of mine. You are a very welcome 'face', dear man!

Thank you for coming to read this and for leaving your gracious thoughts.

A construct, no, at least not a formal one. Just one of my own with a poem within a poem sort of thing... did you see it?

~soft smile~

A dear family friend died this past week after a valient three year battle with cancer. Michael was a fine man whose favorite pastime was running the river in his hand made canoe. This was for him. I'll miss him greatly, but know that he is only a river's bend away...

Again, thank you, charlie. I've many replies to get caught up on from the week I've missed, at least one of which was yours, which touched my heart and meant more to me than you could possibly know...

Respects to you,


( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: August 3, 2004 )

lines what lines~smiles
All I saw was the cleansing, river filling tears and your beautiful poem. Melinda this is wonderful writing. You have filled me with feelings so I have to write a river poem my self. About the one my Nannna loved and lived on. This was one case that knowing the background had a huge positive impact. thanks, huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: August 3, 2004 )

this river
this is an awesome poem, filled with love and mourning, and a good energy that seems a bit resigned. I saw your poem in a poem...that is a very nice method, i'd like to try that someday. I hope your sadness is abating. And i'm really glad i stumbled over this poem in particular.

( Posted by: MzJen1 [Member] On: August 4, 2004 )

Claire, MzJen, Huni on the river

Huni, you are such a dear person! Thank you for your sweet words! Oh, please, I love to see your poem about a river!

MzJen, Hello! It's nice to 'meet' you! Thank you for reading this and for your gracious words on it.

Resigned. Yes, I guess that one could see it that way. I think of it more as.. accepting, especially in this case. My friend had been in pain for a long time. he had lived a wonderful, fullfilling life and was ready to move on. His family and friends, (mostly) realized this and bid him well on his new journey-- he would have liked that... Thank you for your thoughts!

Claire, Thank you! You are such a lively spirit, you know that, right? Thanks for your kind compliments on this, I'm quite honored by your comparison!

I'm humbled and comforted by all of your good wishes and kind words. Michael was ready to go, and therefore, in spite of missing him, I am eased by the knowledge that he is at peace now, and pain-free... and perhaps, running that river in the canoe he loved so well.

Thank you,


( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: August 4, 2004 )

This River...
What a tribute to a friend... Your loving words truly soothe the soul... I'm sure he's comforted by them... You write so touchingly...

I remember the wisteria as well, a beautiful piece, it too is a soul soother...

Outstanding Write...

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: August 4, 2004 )

Lucie, Dan on the river

Lucie, I love that you understood that! Thank you, thank you! I thought that that would stay a private meaning, but you got it; I'm thrilled! You have such wonderful insights, dear poet! Thank you for your comforting, gracious words, too. Was Michael lucky? Yes, in many ways, but no more fortunate than they who knew him. He was that sort of soul...

Dan, thank you. You are such a gentleman and very kind. Your comments mean a lot to me.

Regards to you both,


( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: August 5, 2004 )

This River (MKL)
" . stretched taut and smooth, from edge to edge ." Outstanding!

- Carl

( Posted by: cjmiller [Member] On: August 6, 2004 )

This river Carl

Thank you so much! I am thrilled that you liked those lines.

Thanks for the "Outstanding!" -- It means a lot to me!



( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: August 7, 2004 )

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