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They have written your name among the stones
We had no choice but to make you a saint
I shall weep on down to my very bones

This'll be the place where the bagpipe drones
How may we speak with such undue restraint?
They have written your name among the stones

Why must we be silent and stay the groans?
Shall we let you lie dead without complaint?
I shall weep on down to my very bones

Strike the day with our swords and make atones
Take heart sister Mary we shall not faint
They have written your name among the stones

We will slay the beast, foul the blood he owns
Spill it in buckets, all Hell shall it taint
I shall weep on down to my very bones

And now let us speak in dark undertones
How we will make amends with bloody paint?
They have written your name among the stones
I shall weep on down to my very bones


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The following comments are for "Villanelle for "Mary, Queen of Scots""
by williamhill

saint mary
Hi William. Your title made me open this piece. I like this piece but I was wondering something. They made Mary Queen of Scots a Saint? When you were writing this piece, were you at the time feeling a personal bond with Scotland or did you read something about Mary? Your thoughts are reminiscent of what the local people felt back then. If it was written with nobility in mind, the poem would have read, Good riddance to her and her ilk ;)
I hope you don't mind me asking these questions, just trying to figure out what you were thinking of at the time. Mary, as a child, was raised in France and engaged to the French Dauphine before she came to Scotland, and fickle and contrary she was. I'm not sure though if loyalty stemmed from her beauty and caring ways as the Queen of Scots, or if it had more to do with her Scottish blood.

Good piece.

Kimberly

( Posted by: Kimberly Bird [Member] On: August 3, 2004 )

Mary
Hi kimberly. no they didn't, but the Scots needed to have a reason to be pissed off. (i'm scottish)I was hoping that no one would mistake my capitalization of her name(non) as a real bonifide Saint. there were those who thought her as such as a means to their ends.it seems to be a trait inherant to our tribes. thanks for reading and backround.

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: August 3, 2004 )

Mr Hillbilly
Another Wow! I am glad you are bringing back the VILLANELLE MADNESS... It's been missed here. I wonder what inspired you to write about Mary this time?

(off topic: I hope you'll repost your 'The Unlearning of Fear', though I got it printed on paper, I still would like to find that here so I could post my comment, and I guess the others also noticed it's disappearance, thanks... ;)

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: August 4, 2004 )

Mary
thank claire for reading.

peter, the best way to tell you my innspiration is that the first line and third line came into my head and kept rolling around until a villanelle formed. the end rhyme of the first line of the second stanza happened to be drone.
I only figured bagpipes drone and it went to Mary from there. it doesn't make much sense how this stuff comes out but that's the best i can tell you.


I have reposted the two poems previously listed on lit. they should be out around saturday or sunday. thanks, Charlie

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: August 4, 2004 )





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