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Your volatile emotions for me, dearest
Have escaped thru your termite-holed walls:
The frenzied breaths in the after-midnights
Lick sweaty kiss-marked skins collapse and slither
Toward the red ocean of burning fiery candles in the dark.

Held-back tears of ecstasy
Enjoy the wisdom and division of attention;
But pause for a little while, dearest
To answer this question briefly:

How many times does love masturbates hate
To lick your fascination for me off your ice cream?

It melts quickly in its sudden death a hundred times more
Than the countless rebirth of my phoenix:
My Alpha
Is your Omega

My voice creates music of madness in the background,
Ready to belt a symphony for the little gathering;

And then suddenly my throat constricts:
Turning around, our muse, dearest, succumbs to demise.

------
rbs


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The following comments are for "Toll"
by Lasher

Metaphoric icecream
"How many times does love masturbates hate
To lick your fascination for me off your ice cream?"
This line is like a sharpened blade, honed and aimed with exquisite accuracy. One of the best metaphors I've seen in considerable time... This entire piece is extremely well told, the subjects wear no faces, but i can see, and almost mimic each mannerisim, each movement they make. Love this!

( Posted by: De`esse [Member] On: August 3, 2004 )

ohmeemama
Thanks a lot guys for all ur comments. They certainly will continue to inspire to keep on writing, although I still feel insecure showing them to great poets/artists like you all here. Thanks again, Claire, De`esse! I read both ur works and they're superb!

( Posted by: lasher [Member] On: August 4, 2004 )





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