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My dawn-kisses might be too lame for you.

Inspire me, red-cap my head with intricate words: FRENZY!
You laughed uncontrollably, my wicked smile deceitful;
Easy to please, yet so hard to understand.

I got claustrophobic over your coccyxial cacophony;
Blatant: but artfully executed while you fake a slumber over me.

Loved, Beloved, I ran out of words.

Fifteen thousand bliss dived silently towards the in-betweens of you and me
Heady rhapsody blared towards the frog-ponds behind your lair;
Zen entered, daisies weltered and wilted on our G-spots.

Eros, the god, cavorted with Venus, the lizard, against the plywood;
I blinked, awed: you deciphered the dazed movements, fearful,
But intending to recreate the graphics displayed on your blue walls.

Sometimes your door opens, sometimes not
But nothing matter because you shaved twice today
I rile you up, you say "it does not make an ounce of difference..."

Your lair, full of water bottles, seduces my thirst for biblical passages;
Our mothers debate the sanctity of our unmarried fascination for each other;
Pop servers not responding, cannott send or receive emails, my dearest.

My dawn-kisses might be too addictive for you.

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rbs


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The following comments are for "Dawn-kisses"
by Lasher

Dawn-kisses
I need something like this sometimes to enchant me. 'Unmarried fascination' dazes. I liked the eroticism this poem implied. What's the significance of 'fifteen thousand' bliss?

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: July 29, 2004 )

15,000
The significance of the number is (I think) just to magnify the intensity of the "bliss" feeling. Thanks for your comment. I appreciate it a lot. Im overwhelmed. :-)

( Posted by: Lasher [Member] On: August 4, 2004 )

Nice, Lasher
I agree with Peter, (by the way he is an exceptional commenter,,,,wonderful!!).
It is nice to see you, are you relatively new?
I haven't had time to read lots here and comment but I am trying!!!! LOL.
Anyway, this sure captured me, Lasher, keep 'em coming!!

My best to you,
Darlene

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: August 26, 2004 )

Im a greenhorn...
Thnx, Darlene, for commenting. I really appreciate it. I recently became a member here and that was last month. The poems I published here are newly-created ones, very amateur and lacked the verve I know but Im thankful that some are appreciated still. I know I should work harder on it as all of them are just done in one sitting and given little editing and brushing up. I hope I'll be getting more creative criticisms that wuld give me ideas why some lines in some poems I submit here wont work at all. Again, muchas gracias, Darlene!

( Posted by: Lasher [Member] On: August 28, 2004 )





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