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You have transformed these virgin eyes,
with your unedited ways.

I've abandoned my innocent instincts,
to nurture this desire to be all woman.

No need to persuade me to follow,
I am finding my own way.

Feel free to question my motives.
No need to ask to abandon inhibitions.

My mind has not been poisoned.
I am free and liberated.

My fingers and lips will stray,
roam free to wherever my heart wills them.

Don't keep your desires a secret,
avail the thought through expression.

Don't emend your performance,
I am seduced with the unedited me.



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I am on a journey. Looking for Me. Everyday I get a little closer. The more time goes by the more I realize I'm always changing. This journey could take forever... Renae L. Soler


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The following comments are for "Unedited Ways"
by nae411

Unedited
For Me, this has been the only way to live. When I lived inside of a societal box, it about killed who I am. Much better to be free to discover and enjoy what life presents...life is seductive isnt it?!

Thank you for the comment on A Message. That really happened to Me. I really did awake and see/feel/hear those things. The poem "Other Side of Suicide" was written for this very uncle, that came to Me that night with a message of hope. Im glad I was able to capture that message in a poem. Again, thank you for your continued support and comments! They mean alot to Me.

Adele *hugz*

( Posted by: SinamonAngel [Member] On: July 28, 2004 )

INHIBITION THAT'S ABANDONED.
"No need to ask to abandon inhibitions." I get deep into it; why, are you going too much in secured?Or else you are ,as you do,showing that very unique mode of yours and the self-exposure that takes me to have a mystery about the universal appeal of acceptance that I get in your poems so gravely.
It's always new with you, nae.
My expressions are not as a apt critic, so don't take otherwise, please.
Regards,
Myth.

( Posted by: Myth [Member] On: July 28, 2004 )

Adele, Myth and Claire
Thank you so much for your comments.

Adele, I feel the same way, trash the societal box, let down my guard, what you see is what you get!

Myth, I wasn't exactly sure what you are asking me and I really want to answer you honestly, are you asking if I am insecure or if I was insecure, if that is what you are asking, yes, I used to be, I am not anymore. Thank you so much for your comment.

Claire, I hope you realize how wonderful it is to have you on staff, I think I speak for everybody on how nice it is to have your comments. Thank you.

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: July 28, 2004 )





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