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The Raine Night

I hear a rat-tat-tat
comeing for the room next door,
I see a scary object moveing
outside my bedroom door,
I hear a man laughing an evil laugh
in the hall,
Then I awoke from my horrible dream
To find my favorite horry book next to me
Then i go fast a sleep

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The following comments are for "The raine night"
by OpTiCaL

This review ="10"
I'm giving the review a 10 for the helpful feedback and the grammar lesson. Not only that, it was all done in a constructive and sensitive manner.

About the poem, it was interesting, and it obviously could have used the editing. But I think it expresses the feeling of nighttime insecurity very well. So the message you were trying to send was recieved.


( Posted by: Richard Dani [Member] On: March 21, 2002 )

Ya, I tried editing it as much as possible but i was tried when i wrote it and falling asleep!

( Posted by: OpTiCaL [Member] On: March 21, 2002 )

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