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I slip
quietly unnoticed
into my own cocoon
a secret shangri-la
floating in twilight mists

I pick
a pink daisy
brushing my naked legs
I feel so new
my sins forgotten

Soft rain
drops from above
I turn my face
up to the heavens
What utter bliss!

I taste
the wet dew
on the morning glory
so sweet and soft
It quenches my thirst.

Lil angels
greet me
near the water’s edge
crowned in daisies
and butterflies

Soft wind licks my face
ruffles my skirts
stained and happy
light and free

The water beckons
I wade into its depths
push my toes
into soft green moss
in its murky bottom

I wave
to the cherubs
playing in the distance
little innocents
lost in time and space

I slip further
into the depths
Silence hushed
to welcome
my presence

peace embraces me
Like an infant
I suck her breast.

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The following comments are for "Slip (On Dying)"
by Shakti

great imagery! I really love this poem. This 'feels' like dying should-- quiet and so peaceful:)

( Posted by: Cynical_Scribe [Member] On: August 3, 2004 )

I love the contrast of the imagery and the theme. Ironically, it is so full of life but then I suppose, life is full of death. I don't know if it is comforting or threatening, but I like that ambivalence.

( Posted by: kssterling [Member] On: August 4, 2004 )

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