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At one time this had a point, a good point. I fed it and played with it everyday, took it out for walks, all that stuff...then I god fed up and broke it's head open.

This is why I don't write during assemblies. Whatever great idea I had at the beginning will be mangled beyond recognition at the end. I can't write and pay attention to authority at the same time :|

Enough of my bitching.

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AS I RUN
my broken heart pumps acid and bile
through thin corroded veins
leaks out to course over
torn bundles of muscle
dripping from
raw red freshly ripped flesh
leaving a trail of
my lifeblood
sizzling on the pavement

EVERY HEAVY POUNDING STRIDE
echoes off the cold faceless
sinister
towers of steel and glass
money and blood
sweat and tears
the tops are high above me
slicing pure pristine
clouds
of pollution
pregnant and ready
to excrete a rain
of razorblades

THE HEAVY STEEL DESTROYER
is still clutched in my claw
aroused by the taste of blood
eager to take another life

I STUMBLE
into a dank alley
pulse thundering in my head
breath comes in ragged wheezes
arms are dead weight
legs filled with lead
i lean against a wall
breathe
breathe
breathe

THE RAIN STARTS
and i fall
fall down into cold
concrete caress
too tired to go on
too tired to care
too tired to live
no use in running again
they will find me
leave me a mess
of bullets and bone fragments
splattered in a lonely
cold alley

REGRET

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And another thing is, no matter how much you think you love someone, you'll step back when a pool of their blood edges too close.


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The following comments are for "What Was I Thinking?"
by direb0y

this is a very graphic poem
I don't know what else to say, except that the last word I think is slightly an anticlimax. I wonder if you could elborate more on that, otherwise it seems strangely sudden and hard, it doesn't seem to match with the rest of it.

( Posted by: Furius [Member] On: March 19, 2002 )

eh
whatever ending I had in mind when I started writing this piece obviously didn't make it, and I honestly can't remember what that ending was supposed to be...

ADD is a bitch.

( Posted by: direb0y [Member] On: March 19, 2002 )





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