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Tentacles penetrate my skin
Freeing blood, not caring
Searching for the nerves within
Slicing flesh, going deeper

Needlepoint fingertips grind against my spine
Open mouth, I try to scream
But as it looks for emotions to refine
It will not let me have control

Rewriting everything I know
Streamlining how I think
Keeping my memories low
Inside my head, I try to keep them

My arms, reaching back, not moving
I have no mind, its taking over
My eyes, frozen open, not blinking
Enslaved by the parasite

Abruptly it lets go, finished with me
Everything absorbed, everything erased
Suddenly my thoughts return, This cannot be
A last moment of despair

Disfigured limbs, twisted face
Distorted by themselves, induced by invasion
The moon light dances on the trees
Reflecting off the pool of blood

Now I,
Am a body without a mind
No I,
Systematically erased

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Stay metal!
-xit


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The following comments are for "Enslaver"
by xitwound117

Actually...
Aliens wasn't an influence on this. Now that I think about it, it does fit rather well with the Alien universe.

The ending with non-rhyming stanzas is a quirky habit I have. Sorry if it threw you off. Thanks for the comment.

( Posted by: xitwound117 [Member] On: July 26, 2004 )





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