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Oh! look, Oh! look back
please look deep into my eyes
and then I will know

Not the poem which we have read, but that to which we return, with the greatest pleasure, possesses the power and claims the name of essential poetry.

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The following comments are for "eyes (senyru?)"
by Huni

Eyes (Senryu)
This is what I call breathtaking Huni! Such a simple theme but speaks a thousand stories! Please, please teach me how to write this form of poetry, senryu... (with my eyes pleading)

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: July 27, 2004 )

Aww, you guys!
Thank you for your comments. I almost didn't post this. So certain it would miss the mark. Also I just realised the proper place for it is under Haiku, yes?
How to do it Peter? Goodness. It is just catching those moments that tickle the brain, stab the heart, catch the breath. Then sitting awhile with that and let the words come. This only seems to happen, when I'm open to seeing in that special way. That is, in a calm, peaceful state. An example would be this one, 'eyes', which I'm presuming is a senyru.
Sitting in a cafe one day, I got to day dreaming and out of that dreamy background, some thing happening before me came into the foreground with such clarity it was palpable. At a table a little way from me, a man and two of his companions got up and left. What I noticed, was the way one of the young women still sitting, was watching the man leave. And so this Haiku was born. May be explaining this has spoilt it for other readers. I usually leave it so they can each find for themselves, one of the 'thousands stories' you spoke of Peter. Well I've said more than enough so thanks again and I'm off, regards h.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: July 27, 2004 )

This made me laugh quite a bit. You desribed perfectly how sometimes I feel when sitting on a train and someon takes my breathe away, please turn round and look at me, make eye contact you horrible person!!!! Whay are syou staring out of the window!!??!! *ahem* okay, that's enough *sidles off to the corner*

Alex :-)

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: July 27, 2004 )

Laughing too Alex.
Come out of that corner! You made me really laugh out loud. You funny thing, you. Watch out, maybe someone someday will write a Haiku about you. ~smile~ regards huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: July 27, 2004 )

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