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(honestly i don't care if the spelling is correct or exct. i just care if the work is good.)

Hello, is there anybody out there?

Excuse me, do you even care?

About the decisions i make, and the actions i decide to take.

And if i called apon you, Would you come?

Or would you leave me restless and lonsome.

And by the time your done reading, Would you even think to start worrying?

About the decisions i will make, or the actions i might take.



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The following comments are for "Would you care?"
by u wont understand

Kinda short...
Eh, this was okay. Not bad or absurdly cliche, but it wasn't outstanding. Perhaps if there was a bit of a story and it was a bit longer it'd be better. As it is, however, its decent.

( Posted by: xitwound117 [Member] On: July 25, 2004 )

dear clairesbest you are very right. I guess at the moment I was getting a little frusterated about in each comment the spelling errors. I know they can be fixed and I usualy don't write with so many errors. It's probably since I am so focused on writing the poem that I don't pay close attention to how I am writing it, but hey what more can you expect from a spunk 13 year old!
My regards,

( Posted by: u wont understand [Member] On: July 29, 2004 )

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