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Upon whispering shores of silky soft sand
With each stride we take the coolness of the ocean
Bathes us to mid calf while intimacies we share
Are heard only as murmurings

And giggling children pass by,
Scurrying with their little buckets
The Sun almost furtively steals into the water
We stop... Alone now... In the shadowy light

The falling night watches as we Embrace...
Our bodies... Are soothed by warm breezes
Your closeness intoxicates my soul
We begin to sway to unheard music

Then Dance... Barefoot in the dark surf
While moon light glimmers...
And the Gods...
They smile down on us

------
Daniel Lloyd Kennedy


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The following comments are for "Evening Stroll"
by daprdan

How Romantic!
Beautiful imagery Dan...really romantic.

But you haven't lived till you've strolled the beaches here at the Jersey Shore. That's REALLY romantic!

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: July 24, 2004 )

Will Have To...
Try that, I love beaches, moon light, the wind in my face...

It's always nice to hear from you, truly...

Thank You for stopping by Aunt Bea...

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: July 24, 2004 )

I Am...
So glad you liked it...

Thank You for stopping and reading it Lucie...

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: July 24, 2004 )

Dan-Evening Stroll
What I like most with your poems, Sir Dan, is its purity that's never lacking passion. I don't know, sometimes, I think this is what I cannot have in my love poems, the innocence. I notice that your new avatar inspired you to the maximum level to be able to write such very very good love poems.

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: July 29, 2004 )

Impression
Dan - This and 'Consumed'. I couln't figure out what it was; then it hit me. There are a number of adjectives to describe: gentle, subtle and so on. However, it seems that the appeal is in that there doesn't seem to be anything 'forced' - in the piece(s) or on the reader. Nice job.
Also, sorry to read of your mother's passing.
All the Best - Carl

( Posted by: cjmiller [Member] On: September 13, 2004 )

Consumed Thanks...
Peter, I'm so sorry I didn't respond right away... I always appreciate your reading me... The avatar hasn't inspired me really, it just portrays the state of mind I have always had... Life is a journey, and I'm ready to hit the road at the drop of a hat... Always have been, and done this... In fact I have two bags packed at all times... and two back packs as well... But then again I am a Sagittarian...

Carl, You would know much more than I, the mechanics of language... I am a mechanic but of a different kind... My abilities in writing are merely from reading and listening... A rant one day will explain those problems... After Mom passed I decided to share my poems of her, and did so again just recently here... Thank you for stopping by, I hope you enjoy the others I have written, someday...

( Posted by: daprdan [Member] On: September 13, 2004 )





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