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Hard rain falling down
across the graffitied wall
tells another tale

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Not the poem which we have read, but that to which we return, with the greatest pleasure, possesses the power and claims the name of essential poetry.


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The following comments are for "Rain"
by Huni

Rain
Good collection of haiku, Huni. Now you have the Rain in your list, and this one didn't let me down like the others. I love the way your style in writing haiku can easily give you away, like I would know it's Melinda's if I read one from her, or that it's Londongrey's. I would know if it's the Gypsy's!

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: July 23, 2004 )

rain and graffiti, Huni and Peter
I liked this, Huni. Peter's comment made me smile, as it IS interesting how even with haiku, we each have our own style. I like that comment immensely.

I so like what this has to say. I have a graffiti 'haiku' as well... kind of different because it isn't quite so nature-y as true haiku should be, but I like it.

I'm always pleased to read your work, Huni.

And, Peter... I'll take what YOU said as a grand compliment. It's nice to have a distinctive style!


Regards,

Melinda


( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: July 23, 2004 )

Melinda and Peter
Thank you, both. I was touched as well Peter by your comment. Serenem, I would love to see your Graffiti Haiku, could you post it? regards huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: July 23, 2004 )

Melinda and Peter
Thank you, both. I was touched as well Peter by your comment. Serenem, I would love to see your Graffiti Haiku, could you post it? regards huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: July 23, 2004 )

bob
Wow thank you, I will, put it under haiku that is. How do I do that now tho'? Huniku?! You have me chuckling, that was sweet of you to include me in your little counter stratagem for cataloguing our work. I agree with the spiritual aspect of Haiku, It seems to come from some hard to define place deep inside me. It come whole (most times) and with out to much intellectual input. Strange eh! Poetry tho', for me any way, seems to be an intellectual and insightful process, that requires much work. Oh well, I'll keep on trying poetry. thanks for your interest bob, I value it. regards huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: July 23, 2004 )

graffiti haiku
Well, it's one of my early attempts, Huni, and not all that 'true to form', but somehow, I still like it.
This is probably a breach of the rules (and if it is, I sincerely apologize-- come ahead and smack me down) I am not looking for critique-- just posting it for you. Any way here it is:


Graffiti blossoms
rampant on broken walls, in
concrete jungle heat


~smile~

If I were to crit this one, myself, these days, I'd probably say how bad it was!

Heee hee.

(your graffiti is better'n' mine, dear)


Regards,

Melinda

( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: July 23, 2004 )

falling
there are a hundred lines in this "poem",Huni. i got brain freeze thinking of them all. the crowd cries, More.... More.... More! this is a gallon of the best ice cream i ever ate.

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: July 24, 2004 )

Serenem and williamhill
Melinda, thanks for sharing with me.May I suggest something? What if you lose the comma and the 'in', and you have a nice one here. I see the heat of the city and the small splash of colour stuck on the walls. Speaks to me of many things. Forget about the syllables this time. I'm with you. The spirit of Haiku may not be in the pedantic counting of syllables. smiling here~.

Williamhill, I just love you, it's like having a personal cheer team, lol, to read your last few comments. regards to you both, huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: July 24, 2004 )





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