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Betrayal (a haiku)

please don't tell me, eyes
where and what to say next time
lover in me dies

Be daring, be different, be impractical, be anything that will assert integrity of purpose and imaginative vision against the play-it-safers, the creatures of the commonplace, the slaves of the ordinary. -- Sir Cecil Beaton (1904-1980) English photographer

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The following comments are for "Betrayal (a haiku)"
by Idomis

Very good, Idomis! Just a wild guess, 'eyes' also refer to someone in particular, someone whose eyes enthralled you.

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: July 23, 2004 )

Aye, see?
It could mean THAT also. However, the eyes here represents the all-encompassing image of the physical and as well as the metaphysical/spiritual aspects on things and occurences.

The "Lover" could mean a passion for anything.

( Posted by: idomis [Member] On: July 28, 2004 )

If that's the case, this poem is even better than how I first saw it. Very good!

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: July 28, 2004 )

on a relative vision
Thanks for your hindsight, by the way! ;)

( Posted by: Idomis [Member] On: July 28, 2004 )

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