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I will wait for you,
Until the stars fall from the heavens,
I am yours.

Iíll stand beside myself
Until you return
Please donít forget me.

Iíll age,
Get older
but your beauty is forever.

The Wrinkled photographs
are all I have.
I will use them to remember.

Iíll remember that last kiss,
The kiss in the hospital.
The promise I made.

Tears ran down our faces,
The doors closed on what
I thought was forever.

You rest on this hill,
Flowers all around you.
I stand here everyday, loving you.




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The following comments are for "I'll wait here for you"
by DEMONeyesBLUE

please read this
please check out this poem, tel me what you think about it

( Posted by: DEMONeyesBLUE [Member] On: July 25, 2004 )

I'll Wait and On Vanity
I must say that this is really very beautiful. I understand that you are still a young man, but it's really timely that windchime wrote a piece that's so close to dealing with this topic you chose for your poem. I am sorry, you may not even consider the phrase 'topic you chose'... because this is a very sentimental piece and I share with your sentiments, to be honest.

( Posted by: peterpaulino [Member] On: July 26, 2004 )

wonderful
This is a great poem and the flow is impeccable and flows melliflously but if you used more figurative language like metaphors and similes you would become the next shakespeare.

( Posted by: Henriamaa [Member] On: July 26, 2004 )

Tight
It is tight, restraining. I know the pain is hard to handle, but letting it out, letting it spill on to the page in anguish and anger...that will turn this from a sad sentiment to a Kleenex-mandatory piece. You have some good thoughts, good flow, but I just felt there is more.....more passion that needs to be tapped and expressed. Good luck.

( Posted by: raui [Member] On: July 26, 2004 )

I liked this part

"Iíll age,
Get older
but your beauty is forever."

It's not a thought usually spoken in a poem about lost love.

Felicia

( Posted by: FeliciaStone [Member] On: April 13, 2005 )





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