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I left with two black garbage bags
and one small box filled with my past
packed into the trunk of my bestfriend’s car.
Fleeing for my life
that morning, I hugged you both with love
and desperation,
now waved at empty windows
as her car
shook the dirt of our driveway
off its southern wheels.
She bet me tears would come
as we crossed
the Delaware river
just outside Trenton,
the mark of passing between states,
but they did not.
the knot inside pulled tighter,
stretching taut
until it twanged--
until it hummed
like the wires
on rushing telephone poles,
until it sang
glory notes
in the vanishing point
vibrations that shook my body
in infinte ways.
Flying along
an ever thinning line tied to roots
not to be denied,
I thought it would break,
that it should, by all rights,
whipping back,
until it struck and stung
some spot just left of center.
it did not.
No, instead
it found new ways
of stretching,
of singing,
of harmonizing
with the wheels
slapping the pavement
of US#1
headed south
toward rebirth,
these unsevered ties
that survive
the little deaths


"I place these moments in my pocket
to be pulled
at the rush of noon,
the crush of three...
when tears come,
when words must learn to be enough..." MKL

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The following comments are for "Leaving Home"
by Serenem

good coming of age get on down the highway kind of poem.worked well with interwoven assonance and alliteration. enjoyed last 7 lines immensely. you had the gut feelin' down to a tee......Nice, Melinda.

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: July 22, 2004 )

Leaving Home
Well done! Starting a new chapter is so scary. You capture the range of emotions here...

( Posted by: arc [Member] On: July 22, 2004 )

On the Road again!
This is the first day of the rest of your life and you made us a part of it line by line. Your first real foray into Life's big adventure! Well done.

( Posted by: Beatrice Boyle [Member] On: July 22, 2004 )

The end of the Road
This is amazing; I love the structure of it, and it is telling me, it's time for a change. great write...


( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: July 22, 2004 )

home of my own
Serenem, I am not sure if I've had the priviliage of reading you before, but I will certainly be reading more of you now. This is a very moving piece, and one I can relate to personally. I love how you've written this, and it flows perfectly from begining to end...or should I say, from begining to new beginings...Thank you for posting this

( Posted by: Reba [Member] On: July 22, 2004 )

Leaving Home
Thank you, all, for reading this!

Willhill, Thanks for noticing the assonance and alliteration, I think that they are two of the most valuable 'tools' in freeverse. You understood the feeling that I was going for, perfectly.

arc, hello! Yeah, making those big changes in your life can be scarier than taking a leap off a cliff. Fortunately, the landing is often in a better place.

Beatrice, thank you for the good wishes! Things did turn out well (very well) in the not so long run. This actually happened about twenty years ago... some of the pain that led to my hasty flight still remains, but has mellowed in all the years and good things that have occurred since.

Lucie, kind poet! Thank you! I tried to visually show in this poem, the build up of emotions and that tie to my past being stretched taut, like a rubber band and the vibrating twang... while stretched thin, it remained, tied to my roots. And I'm glad it did, despite the pain...

Jeannie! Blessings, dear lady! Sometimes you just have to go on Faith, knowing that things will be as they were meant to be... Thank you.

Reba, it's nice to 'meet' you! Yes, a kindred spirit... these things are what shape our lives. The backstory to this poem is a long and complicated one, for which I feel you may have an inking, thanks for understanding.


Regards to you all,


( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: July 23, 2004 )

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