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breach of contract
lost gorilla
drainage in the lower fields
do the whiplash
turkey's frozen
rub it on my backside please
turn to tuesday
hot man standing
let me be your better eel
locust smokers
bad for business
running out of whales to feed
let the dogs out
suck the tailpipe
sleep and wish for battered dreams



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The following comments are for "THRUST vs SHEEP"
by Codbeef

Great
This reminds me of DrKilldare's last submission. Maybe a bit more absurd, but that is no drawback. And the rhythm and style is very poignant and pulls in the interest of the reader.

( Posted by: Lennart [Member] On: July 16, 2004 )

suggestive
Like you say yourself in the discussion of one of Paxelius' poems: Poetry is the art of suggestion. And you suggest profoundly. I suggest...

( Posted by: Lennart [Member] On: July 16, 2004 )

Amusing
I suggest you refrain from the supercilious attitude of trying to define the art of poetry. Each to his own style, time and place. I find this play with words to be quite easy. That is not why I write poems.

( Posted by: paxelius [Member] On: July 16, 2004 )

This IS more absurd
Yes, Lennart, there is some strange similarities between this and my last poems. I find this more hilarious, funnier, and much more absurd. My style would never be THAT insane, I hope.
har, har...

( Posted by: DrKilldare [Member] On: July 16, 2004 )

Judgement
accepted, Paxelius. I was only trying to describe what poetry CAN be. Shouldn't have formed it so categorically. And Codbeef seems to try to write this way. And I think he succeeds.
But of course every poem must be read in its own right. Yours too.

( Posted by: Lennart [Member] On: July 17, 2004 )

Lennart!
Sorry, I didn't read this until after I posted a lenghty discourse trying to explain once again the rudeness of your definition. It's not you, but Codbeef that tried to define my poem out of the art of poetry. But now I'd like to close this issue. We both know where we stand, but noone knows where Codbeef stands and that's not our problem. ;)

( Posted by: paxelius [Member] On: July 17, 2004 )

I like.
Boggling sentences and exciting word play.

( Posted by: Ingi [Member] On: July 17, 2004 )

new name
and it's shapeshifter. codbeef is history

( Posted by: shapeshifter [Member] On: July 18, 2004 )

Paxelius!
Yes, I agree. As for Codbeef, it is even harder to know where he stands now that he doesn't exist anymore.

( Posted by: Lennart [Member] On: July 21, 2004 )





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