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"Will you be mine?" he murmured in a velvet tone.
"For time evermore; mine alone?"
Will you away with me?" he said with a bow.
"My carriage awaits us, even now."

"Will you dine with me in the pale moonlight?"
And dance with me on sand so white?"
With a sigh so soft, and scarcely heard
She stretched forth her hand with not a word.

With fingers gnarled and oh, so cold
He enveloped her in a satin fold.
His eyes farewelled the room's grey pall.
Death had made his final call.


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The following comments are for "The Call"
by The demure 1

Demure 1
This is wonderful! very unique, very unique.
I enjoyed this a lot.... but sweet sounds of music to my ears....


Blessings,
{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: July 16, 2004 )

good
I quite like this one it reminds me of some of the more gruesome british nursery rhymes the older ones. if you ever get a chance to read some. try them. there is the same playfull tone of mayhem in there...nice and dark. good job.

( Posted by: wally 5 [Member] On: July 19, 2004 )

Way to go Demure!!
Demure is, like a fine wine, improving with time. This was an interesting read. I do wonder why the gothic tone to your work?

( Posted by: witchy woman [Member] On: July 19, 2004 )

Demure
I remembered your work recently and came to check it out again. Why didn't I comment on this the first time? It'w wonderful, dreamy, filled with dreadful anticipation.

( Posted by: Viper9 [Member] On: April 23, 2005 )

The Call
Wendy,

This one was right up my street and appealed to my dark side and sense of humour (sorry was it meant to be serious)!

I hadn't realised I had not commented on this post but mentioned it on your first post, so that's now been put right.

Have you seen my post 'Dead Pretty' (http://www.lit.org/view/15518).... it might interest you given some of your subjects.....

Hope you stay around... but again good luck with the expansion,

Have Fun,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: March 13, 2006 )





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