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"the game is on" the television says
right before changing picture to
small blue rings that is on fire.
inside the house the phone rings
from another house and there
is words spoken.
crossword ontop of the table.
a signature. text on the screen.
digits on the television now.
which reflects on the window.
turned and weird.
not familiar.
dark outside and the world
is big. even bigger than
the closet in the corner
with all the old things in.

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The following comments are for "a word game"
by Ingi

I like the tone and atmosphere you conjure here. The associations from the link between what's in front of the camera and the camera itself, and how this relates to the 'world' are also interesting and vexing, in a nice way.

( Posted by: Lennart [Member] On: July 19, 2004 )

Local meaning
is all that's left, according to Habermas(not to mention Baudrilaire, to the least). The rules of the word game can no longer be seen as "global", after the destruction of the grand narratives. Psychoanalysis, liberalism, nazism and marxism are all dead they say, and we have to rely upon fragmented statements and our internal interpretations of tiny bits of meaning. Your focus here on the television, the phone and loose words is an excellent example of postmodern writing, I like that. But I surely would like your last line to read: "...with all the odd things in." That is my "poetic ear"'s expectation.

( Posted by: DrKilldare [Member] On: July 20, 2004 )

Yes, Im really into all of that. The end felt natural at the time of writing. Im sure that there are lots of ways to approach the subject of this poem, this was mine. Thanks for the comments both of you.

( Posted by: Ingi [Member] On: July 20, 2004 )

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