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Who could have known this day would come? Brushing her hair back from her rain pattered, mud spattered face, I just held her. I tried to wipe the flood of tears that fell from her sweet face onto her dirty hands. They where covered in red mud from trying to tear him back from the earth.

I thought she'd mourn forever the day Ken died. Her angry sobs, thumping her chest into mine.

Meanwhile, Barbie stood, hard faced and smirking. Not even watching while my little girl wept in my arms, the day her brothers beheaded Ken and buried him in our dam.

Not the poem which we have read, but that to which we return, with the greatest pleasure, possesses the power and claims the name of essential poetry.


The following comments are for "The drowning"
by Huni

drowning babs
you kill me---- in a good way huni. lol

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: July 11, 2004 )

The drowning
My applause, Huni! This is funny and a potential for short story. Very very good.

( Posted by: PETERPAULINO [Member] On: July 11, 2004 )

i ain't a gonna' rate it until i see more, just like peterpaulino says. so take that! lol

( Posted by: williamhill [Member] On: July 12, 2004 )

You dare to ask for mo....
Awh! Come on guys, I'm working on this villanelle which is killing me. Give me a break! (Seriously tho', what if that's all I have, scary thought) Thanks for your (funny) input, regards huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: July 12, 2004 )

No shooting
Aww! claire, no one would shoot you. Thank you for your comment and as to what it meant: Some times a mother is torn between validating her childs genuine anguish (and feeling it somewhat as well) and laughing 'till she bust'. Always go with the validation, I say, you can laugh later with dad when he gets home. As to why the boys hated Ken so much, well I think that's another story. lol. regards huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: July 13, 2004 )

This is very funny, emotional, and sweet. Nice one!!

( Posted by: Serendipity [Member] On: July 22, 2004 )

Thanks for coming to read and your comment warmed me up on a rather cold evening here in Ausie-land. It was fun to do, so I may try another one day. Anything but poetry seems out of my league at this time. regards huni.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: July 23, 2004 )

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