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Clicking quietly through this
infinite place of poetry,
being humbled, enthralled, validated.
Moved beyond my usual reticence
to comment on some work
that touched my heart ..
or tore it.

“I’m capable of that ..
Ah! but not this”.
Laughing, crying, puzzled.
Moving on, tripping over
someone's misspelled guts.
Sitting by another's breaking heart.

Sharing this sunset,
that landscape of life.
Touched by a sense
of being entrusted with the depth
in another's mind or being.
To hold it awhile.
To discard it - or make it mine.

Always to become a little more
or less than what I am.


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Not the poem which we have read, but that to which we return, with the greatest pleasure, possesses the power and claims the name of essential poetry.


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The following comments are for "This place"
by Huni

Trust and Responsability
Huni,

Isn't this what it is all about:

'Touched by a sense
of being entrusted with the depth
in another's mind or being.
To hold it awhile.
To discard it - or make it mine.

Always to become a little more
or less than I am.'

Very well put, gives you a real sense of personal responsability, both for others and yourself.

Nice read,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: July 11, 2004 )

Than what I am!
Huni sorry to use you space to talk to Pen.

Pen,

'or less than what I am!'

The use of phrases like this is 'poetry to my ears'...I love this in my own poems, but would never dare suggest iy for the sake of being told 'how bad I speak'. (the critics would say I should say 'who')

Somehow it is also humorous and I just love it!

Huni,

Again I love your work!

Have Fun... both of you,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: July 11, 2004 )

ivordavies
Huni, Pen,

I'm sorry if I gave the wrong impression, I wasn't saying it was bad form to make suggestions, I make them all the time.

I was admiring you Pen for the suggestion and saying that onlookers may 'pull me down' for this and you were braver than me!

Huni's words give us the right to share:

'Moved beyond my usual reticence
to comment on some work
that touched my heart ..
or tore it.'

I find more in it everytime I read it...

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: July 11, 2004 )

Ar.. May I...
Windchime, about your misplelled guts, thank them for the kind invite, very nice of them, to you personally, thanks for your nice comment. regards huni.

Pen, yes I do like that better, I will change it soon. It was not till you mentioned it, I even noticed the lack. Which entirely supports the premise of my poem eh! Thanks again for your support and those lovely comments. I doubt I would ignore anything you said. May not always follow it ; ) , but never ignore.

The 'intangible glimmer' - Yes at times I feel that too and am not sure or feel to shy to say something to the writer and just let it go. That in no way lessons the 'feeling of solidarity' for me tho'. Thank goodness. h.

Ivor, Pen is brave, she goes into the fray where I wouldn't. Wouldn't have her any other way. Thank you for the awesome things you said. I'm honoured to know a poet like you finds something of substance in my work. I love that so many here take the responsibility that you mentioned seriously, while not taking them selves seriously. Or not too much anyway. huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: July 11, 2004 )

Claire
thank-you for saying that. I sometimes question 'my talent', so one of the special things about this site is the support as well as the critique we receive. Ta, regards huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: July 13, 2004 )

This Place
Huni, don't question the talent, you've got it girl, no doubt. Another great write.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: July 18, 2004 )

Aw..Nae
Thank you, I really do appreciate this comment. You are perfect example of why we love 'this place', Lit.org. regards huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: July 20, 2004 )





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