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Pt.I
-As i sit here in this place
while the tears roll down my face
i close my eyes to see
my past,
haunting me in disgrace
i lay down on my bed
to rest my weary head
im feeling no better
i have a headache instead
nobody hears me cry
i've kept it to myself
and i dont know why
My body hurts
its aches with pain
due to all the shit life put me through
any second i could go insane
Theres a song in my head
about a boy and a girl
oh, the way it makes me feel!
love, for me, no way
all my faith is gone
i wish i could be that girl again
i'm giving this world my very all
and sometimes i find that i will fall
as hard as life is
i try to get by
and sometimes it helps
to just sit and cry

Pt.II
-As you sit here in this place
watching the tears roll down my face
i'm opening my eyes to see
your bringing it all back to me
you lay down right beside me
trying to cure the fears inside me
knowing theres nothing more that you can do
than to gently try and hide me
hide me from the pain
of being alone
i still hear that song
i've listened to it all along
it makes me think about us
and the way we used to be
and all that we wouldnt be
if you would've never been with me
as hard as life is
i try to get by
and sometimes it helps
to just sit and cry

Pt.III
_As we sit here in this place
i'm watching the tears roll down your face
we lay here together
it's so quiet in this place
i really dont know why
i didnt mean to make you cry
i guess now you realize
how important you are in my life
I remember the lonely nights
i had to spend before i met you
they're even lonlier now
now that i know what i'm missing
please help me understand
give it your best
do all that you can
I still hear that song
its playing now
and we dance
you hold me
as a tear drops onto your chest
this night is turning into
one of the best
you look me in the eyes
and say youll never leave me
you ask me
"do you still trust me?"
"do you even believe me?"
yes i do
i've always loved you!
now its ok
its all ok
as hard as life is
i try to get by
and sometimes it helps
to just sit and cry










Comments

The following comments are for "-Cry-"
by k8ebug

crying is for babies.
this poem could be reduced by 75% and be better than it currently is.

this is a journal-entry. it is egocentric. good poetry is reader-centered, unlike this.

this is a list of feelings. it wallows. there isnt much imagery. consequently, there isnt much for a reader like me to care about.

( Posted by: die_daily [Member] On: July 9, 2004 )

Poetic Naivete
Hey Katie, sorry it took me so long. To be totally honest, I know absolutely nothing about poetry. So whatever this guy says above me, didn't really make sense lol. But anyways, I thought it was good. It's better than what I could have done. Anyways, keep adding poems to this site!

( Posted by: BobbYates [Member] On: July 10, 2004 )

Cool.
Nice write up Katie. Keep up the good
poetry..

Regards.

Mouse.

( Posted by: Raejon [Member] On: July 12, 2004 )





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