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My mind knows truths
my heart can't see
My soul feels pain
for what should be
I know our fate
I see it's curse
But can't give up
despite the hurt

The smallest chance
that we will be
The biggest hope
that you will see
That not one problem
not one fight
Not one reason
makes this right

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The following comments are for "Slipping Away"
by dmdfreak

hey i really like your poem it just flowed and its full of feeling. very good job!

( Posted by: k8ebug [Member] On: July 8, 2004 )

Hi, Tim
Again a nice poem. Good Rhyming, some thing I struggle with. If I try I get humour. Your poem has some very good expressions in it. Keep going the way you are and read a lot. It inspires and teaches, I find. regards huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: July 11, 2004 )

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