Lit.Org - a community for readers and writers Advanced Search
 




Average Rating
10

(2 votes)


RatingRated by
10lilia
10Teflon

You must login to vote

I'll try naming one of my poems "sex",
Let's see how many readers I'll get
You may not comment, nor leave no trace
But you'll check it out I bet

I just realized that no matter how nice
The poem inside really is
It's the title that counts, the first impression
That makes that poet a "wiz"

I can't deny, I'd do the same,
It's just too ironic, but hey!!
You shouldn't care about comments
Just write those troubles away!!



Related Items

Comments

The following comments are for "sex"
by seniorme

ROFL
Ok, so I normally don't like rhyming poems but considering the subject matter and such...a little modification and you've got a great Hallmark card. :)

( Posted by: raui [Member] On: July 7, 2004 )

Titles
You are totally right about titles. When you see a catchy title, you immediately want to read the rest of the work. I personally have a terrible time creating good titles. Any suggestions?

( Posted by: Brit7 [Member] On: July 7, 2004 )

brit7 and raui
i have the same problem too, i always try to create a title that's so appealing yet related to the poem, i often fail to do so. but the title "sex" has been viewed 23 times already on it's first day. so i'd go about that subject lol... thanx for commenting

( Posted by: seniorme [Member] On: July 7, 2004 )

Ironic
Ironic and funny! I suppose you proved a point!! Good job.

( Posted by: Serendipity [Member] On: July 7, 2004 )

sad but true...
I am one of those that fights to find the prefect title. This was a great way to lure people in and very emphatically prove your point.

( Posted by: BMartinez [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )

You lured me in...
Shame on us... You lured me in.

Nae

( Posted by: nae411 [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )

I can claim virginity....
I only saw lilia's comment title! LOL!!

I will now have my wrist slapped.

Alex :-)

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: September 9, 2004 )

LOL!!!
i never thought i'd get anymore comments on this piece, but great you guys, thanks alot.

( Posted by: seniorme [Member] On: September 10, 2004 )

Not me
I never saw, never came, never read, must have been another huni. huni. (oops)

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: September 10, 2004 )

huni
lol!! those last bunch of comments are probably the funniest i've ever read!! thanx huni

( Posted by: seniorme [Member] On: September 10, 2004 )

Moet's Sex!

Moet,

I am sure I commented on this, did you post it twice? as I remember saying there was a double negative in 'nor leave a trace'.

I liked this when I first read it, but for some reason the meter bothered me, I think it was at a time I was sugesting a 'drum beat' for rhythm.

I hope you do not mind I have played around with it a bit, mainly for fun, but to show how a different tempo and a few different words can slightly reposition the piece.:

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I've tried naming a poem "sex", (8)
To see the visits I get. (7)
You may not come, or leave a trace, (8)
But you'll check it out I bet. (7)

It just occured, it matters not, (8)
How good the poetry is. (7)
The title is the first they see, (8)
That makes this poem a Wiz! (7)

I can't deny, I'm playing games, (8)
By tempting you all this way. (7)
I love your comments on my rhyme, (8)
Showing you care what I say. (7)
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Your version is better Moet, but I thought this one was a good one to decribe my thoughts on rythm, that I never quite got over last time.(note the syllable count).

Thanks again for an excellent write,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: September 11, 2004 )

IVOR
i don't really remember if i had this posted before, but there's a big possibility that that's true. you probably told me to chnge something.lol. anyways your rendition of the poem is lovely, you're stealing the spotlight!!

( Posted by: seniorme [Member] On: September 12, 2004 )

Moet
Sorry Moet, that certainly was not my intention, only to give a different perspective.

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: September 12, 2004 )

ivor
i know i was just joking...Egyptian humor!!

( Posted by: seniorme [Member] On: September 12, 2004 )





Add Your Comment

You Must be a member to post comments and ratings. If you are NOT already a member, signup now it only takes a few seconds!

All Fields are required

Commenting Guidelines:
  • All comments must be about the writing. Non-related comments will be deleted.
  • Flaming, derogatory or messages attacking other members well be deleted.
  • Adult/Sexual comments or messages will be deleted.
  • All subjects MUST be PG. No cursing in subjects.
  • All comments must follow the sites posting guidelines.
The purpose of commenting on Lit.Org is to help writers improve their writing. Please post constructive feedback to help the author improve their work.


Username:
Password:
Subject:
Comment:





Login:
Password: