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dirt road
spider on the bull-bar
rough ride.

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Not the poem which we have read, but that to which we return, with the greatest pleasure, possesses the power and claims the name of essential poetry.


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The following comments are for "Spider"
by Huni

Huni,
I, too, have enjoyed reading Mr. Havens...

Road trip haiku-- hmmmmmmmmn, interesting.


This made me smile, then it made me laugh.

Melinda

( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: July 7, 2004 )

Serenem & bob.
I'm glad you both liked it, a chuckle and a laugh. I love that. I've had a spider clinging to the out side of my car. Like it is riding some huge mechanical bull. Yeeehaaa!. regards huni.

( Posted by: Huni [Member] On: July 8, 2004 )

not the usual
I love condensing a thought, an image into seventeen syllables. Nicely done, but my favorite bit is the title. The implications of "because he makes me laugh seriously" with no comma anywhere are staggering.

( Posted by: cybele [Member] On: July 28, 2004 )

cybele re Andy
Andy challenged us to give him Haiku on the subject 'road trip', so the idea rattled around in my head for a day or so and this fell out. I had just read two articles (blogs?) by him that had really made me laugh. He's pretty smart and had me a bit scared of him to begin with. Those two pieces blew that scary image out of the water. (You can get me with humour every-time.) At the same time, I agree with him, that we need to take our poetry seriously, but NOT ourselves. So - the dedication. And thank you for picking up the intentional, missing comma. I wasn't sure if anyone would get that. One day I might change it to spider. Thanks for commenting and making yourself know to me. I'll check you out.
regards huni. PS I have a new road trip Haiku. I'll put it on today.

( Posted by: huni [Member] On: July 28, 2004 )





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