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Walking along the street
I reach by the end of sixth Avenue.

I look for you,
Your known face,
Your known gait,
Your known worried sight.

Finally I find you,
Half bust.
The other half of you is pasted
On a commercial hoarding.


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The following comments are for "Half Bust"
by Myth

An answer to Claire
Claire,please note, I'm never such a prejudiced person to misunderstand your suggestion.Yes,there is certainly a stumble in putting a comma after "I", and it is disturbing no doubt.
Frankly, my compositions are of a bit spontaneous kind,composed in front of the pc-screen directly, and I cannot always rectify them, what I MUST DO.
I'm sure, as a person like you, will always give me constructive suggestions;it's my strong belief;
thus, thanks a lot for your comment.

( Posted by: Myth [Member] On: July 12, 2004 )

Never been to NY...
but I think I get what you're talking about, some kind of ad with a famous person? Anyway I like the "unfinished" style, and it gives some extra punch to my reading, at least..

Claire: I really appreciate your work and comments, but I just have to mention: I find your avatar a bit annoying. That is, not your lovely smile, but the text. The phrase is here (Europe, that is) connected with a certain president, who again is connected with waging meaningless war and the killing and/or torturing of thousands of innocents. I am just airing my opinion.
(I am shure there are someone who find my avatar annoying as well ;)

( Posted by: DrKilldare [Member] On: July 21, 2004 )





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