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Shade short of twenty
only time my father cried
when he lost his son

Elizabeth Maksymiuk

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The following comments are for "Evanescent"
by emaks

evanescent being
both a description of the loss of one so young and a stoic father's momentary breakdown over such a terrible loss...

Sad and very touching, emak.

I apreciate this, because it is something to which I can relate-- my father was much the same way and the loss of his son was a devastation for him and the only time we held each other and cried, together...


( Posted by: Serenem [Member] On: July 5, 2004 )

Re: Evanescent, comments from Claire and Melinda
Claire and Melinda, thank you both for your comments. I wanted to immortalize my brother, who died over 30 years ago. I felt a death so close, and to one so young, could turn into a sloppy, sappy poem if I wasn't careful. Not what I wanted at all. The brevity of Haiku, (much like his short life) and the deep emotional tie to ths sort of write, I felt could do justice. Hope I succeeded. I'm sorry for your loss Melinda. That you share the pain of watching a father sob in such a circumstance, I'm sure you understand this one...

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: July 5, 2004 )

"Shade short of twenty." Nice job, gave it a 10...

( Posted by: Charmr [Member] On: July 5, 2004 )

Brother lost, brother loved
At holidays, especially, I like to remember him.
Pulled this out of "archives" just for that purpose. I still love you Chip.

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: December 12, 2005 )

April 21st, 1972
Remembering him today, especially. 34 years missing my brother-
blessings and keep those loved-ones close-

( Posted by: emaks [Member] On: April 21, 2006 )

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