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after each a magic moment
the universe adds a break line
where everybody involved are
allowed to think
it
to pieces.



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by Ingi

easy poem
I was thinking more along the lines that "everybody" is those involved in the "moment" and the universe is more like an objective law forced upon us/them. Quite easy going actually. No big bangs :)

( Posted by: Ingi [Member] On: July 4, 2004 )

Impressive perspectives
Didn't get the meaning of adding a break line. But good point about thinking things to pieces. Important to write about the hazards of too much reflection, or the mere fact that it's dangerous to think too much, without acting, that is.
Good poem.

( Posted by: DrKilldare [Member] On: July 4, 2004 )

This piece
is good :)

( Posted by: paxelius [Member] On: July 6, 2004 )

Thanks
Just wanted to say thanks for the feedback. Some re-reads have shown that the poem can be seen in a number of different ways. The typo feedback is also noted. Thanks all!

( Posted by: Ingi [Member] On: July 8, 2004 )





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