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Lightning, Thunda
Water got you unda
Death grips, Life grips
like a Batman Plunda,
Shake this, Shake this if you think you're gonna
I'm tellin' you, you cain't take me unda.

Let me take a moment, a sec to simply shout
Lettin' 'em know y'all, what I be about

Tired of the torture that this man bring,
Saying, "You ain't shit to me Boy, You don't mean a thing"

You don't have what you want,
If you act scared, lie and try 2 front,
Trying to act all nonchalant,
On my knees, beggin "Please"-yeah that's whatcha want.

Sadness, Madness
Why can't you confess?
Be a man, man get it off da chest,
You ain't no different or betta than the rest.

Lighting, Thunda
Water rising, coming over, unda
Batman, Batman! Where is Boy Wonda?
'Scape this, 'Scape this if you gonna.


------
John K Brewster
"Willows whiten, aspens quiver, little breezes dusk and shiver"- Lord Tennyson


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The following comments are for "Super Hero Pain Rap"
by johnb79

slingin slang
john~

I too got a chuckle from this one. Interesting use of slang and odd spelling here. All in all not a bad little stretch for your mad rhymin skills.. Keep bringin' da noise and we'll keep reading.

I loved the Boy Wonder line, btw.

Bart

( Posted by: Bartleby [Member] On: July 6, 2004 )





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