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Today I dance in the glory of spring.
Feeling the light of the sun re-energizing my soul.
I smile in delight as I praise the lamb.

Today I listen to the winds howling by.
The chills of Old man winter nipping at my skin
I sit in reflection as I praise the Lion.

Oh March, the month of surprises!
The month of promises of spring coming
The month of remembrance of winter

The lamb and the lion tangled in War.
One roars and fights and looses.
One silently whispers and wins.

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The following comments are for "March"
by kat

your poem
1)comma after skin, 2nd stanza
2)comma after coming and period after winter, 3rd stanza
3)don't like the fourth stanza especially 2nd line
4)change 1st line of 4th staza into "The lamb and the lion are tangled in a war,/as one roars, fights, and looses,/And the other silently battles and wins."

( Posted by: mj20300 [Member] On: March 11, 2002 )

Thanks for the comma's and other information. I must learn to double check that when I do a cut and paste that everything shows up. I am still stuggling with grammer issues so I do appreciate any suggestions.

When I do a poem it is like listening to music to me and this is how I write them with movements that are unheard and unseen but felt. The hard part is helping others to feel the movement I am feeling as I am writing :-)

( Posted by: kat [Member] On: March 14, 2002 )

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