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I stumbled,a jolt..
And saw my foot bleeding.

who are you?
Can't you see your face?

Can anybody see his face?
No,without reflection,
I cannot.
I start searching for a mirror,
In a crazy haste,
Here and there,
I keep on searching.

Achilles l am,
Only l can win over Troy,
I'm that audacious.

But, l'm deprived of
A simple protection-
At the time of birth...Styx..bath...
An unprotected heel is still there and...

O mother,
Can't you see your boy is killed
At that very heel!
let Troy be burnt over thousands of years.
In future somebody will feel.

Can you see your face? My mirror?....
l'm stumbled,
I can't see..........l, Achilles.

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The following comments are for "Lost in Myth..."
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A toast for Achilles
I like this history, and it's certainly been used by poets through the ages(of course; the germans). I think it's a bit blurry and uncertain, this poem, and the subjects changes a lot(in the different sentences). But let's all propose a toast for Homer!

( Posted by: DrKilldare [Member] On: July 9, 2004 )

I Think I figured something out!
Your mind races everywhere and it shows in your writings and your imagery and descriptions are unique but just not focused myth!!! Now if you harness and guide these poetic thoughts and make them obey a direction to get to your message delivered your works would be so much easier to understand! Don't let your thoughts control your writing but the other way around and you will see the end result will be easy to absorb poetic works!

( Posted by: ladyngold [Member] On: May 30, 2005 )

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