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Could you pluck this vase,
so hidden away,
so empty but from stagnant, bitter water
and be my saviour?

Turn this poison to wine, so sweet.
Only so I can stumble,
drunkenly
into the faith of your magic.
Your trick is pious.

And you too can enjoy the fragrence,
can savour the taste.
Together.
Intoxicated,
As the vase always tempts with a bottomless cup.

But it becomes all too passŤ.
Our brew is normal.
Mediocre.
The come-down is a fall to earth
and the shit-taste left for you
reeks of disappointment.
Because you forgot your
sleight of hand
but remembered the illusion.
As christ you are nothing more than
a magician.

For eternity you've suckled
this bottle, tainted
and spit your ruse to the ground.
While I laugh at the irony-
cry as my dogma lies
tattered on the ground.
I fucking should have known
I was always dirty water.
How couldnít i know
I'd disappoint again.



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The following comments are for "dirty water"
by joeyjoejoe3

GO...
It's my third time, I came back to this piece, a brave stunt dragged me back. Otherwise I was going away NOT leaving any comment.
At 1st I found you to be blasfamous, then I thought again, having had little time in my hand before logging out.No,it's of its own kind, with a different tone and a say.
"As christ you are nothing more than
a magician."
But it was not enough at all, I found myself in a quest-land when I repeated reading:
"For eternity you've suckled
this bottle, tainted
and spit your ruse to the ground.
While I laugh at the irony-
cry as my dogma lies
tattered on the ground."
It's still haunting me, how deeply you have taken the matter in your own way, maybe far away from my view.Exclusively bold!
I should say just one word : GO...


( Posted by: Myth [Member] On: July 15, 2004 )





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