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When all that's behind
is betrayal,
it's not easy to forget.
When I turn my back on
their eyes,
unspoken is the shame
lining my face.

This flesh is so sacred
to me.
Yet I burn it to feel
the stench on my skin.
I called you friend.
You did me the same.
I watched it as it suckled you
until you were dry
but from tears.
And then you knew
that I lock regrets heed
and all its sorrow
in a room of trophies
with walls of deceit.

Fatigued has this all become.
And me a little too,
I guess.
But I've suckled this
cancerous shrine.
It is my turn,
it is my time.
And it feeds on all that
is me.

As it grows I feel so dry.
The storms have formed
deep in my eyes.
But at least now I
can rest.
As entwined,
together,
we die.




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The following comments are for "cycle"
by joeyjoejoe3

joey
This is like something I would write, very introspective, reflection, with a liberation at the end.

Strong write

Alex

( Posted by: londongrey [Member] On: July 14, 2004 )

Cycle;
Joeyjoejoe3;
This was grand, something that someone could look into their own feelings and thoughts...

Blessings,

{{{Jeannie}}}

( Posted by: JEANNIE45 [Member] On: July 14, 2004 )

SUPERB
Joey,in a word it's superb. You have given an extract of your heart, as if you have squeezed out yourself.
Or I should say a true poetry comes out squeezing one's soul.Thus it's te toughest expression of all, especilly in literature; it is one's very privy excogitation that leads one to create it. I'm still not such as yet, but but I feel, I feel it deeply.
But does it go on and on this way?
Yes, I think so,decaying oneself it goes on in mind, as you have said in a candid manner,
"And then you knew
that I lock regrets heed
and all its sorrow
in a room of trophies
with walls of deceit."
Let me utter again, SUPERB!

( Posted by: Myth [Member] On: July 14, 2004 )

Reflection
Great reflection....very emotional!! Well written, thanks for sharing this.

( Posted by: Serendipity [Member] On: July 14, 2004 )





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