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Traumatized I was,
In the kitchen with a knife,
A perfect opportunity to end my life

The silver blade so thorny and sharp
So frightened I was,
But I knew not to carp

The quicker, the simpler, the better I thought,
A wrist cut should do it,
A clean cut I sought.

I squeeze my fist so hard and so tight,
As tears filled my eyes
They blurred my sight

I shut my eyes, I took a deep breath
Knowing that soon
I'd be nothing but a myth

I gritted my teeth as I set the blade,
I sliver, I faint
And all rest fades




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The following comments are for "short"cut" to hell"
by seniorme

Short Cut....
This is a deep poem. There is a nice climax in this poem; Keep up the good work.

( Posted by: DBurke [Member] On: July 3, 2004 )

Ouch
THe title explains it all I suppose. "short cut to hell". This poem really hit me......it's sad, but it totally describes today's youth. Thanks for your honesty

( Posted by: Serendipity [Member] On: July 4, 2004 )

different
This poem was different from the others I've been reading through. I hope you haven't personally experienced this kind of deep sadness. This is really a good poem, like all the rest. Was this poem written before or after you had trouble with a title? This title is certainly perfect in this context!

( Posted by: Brit7 [Member] On: July 9, 2004 )





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