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10Charmr
10Dareva
10ivordavies
10londongrey
7Odysseus
10SinamonAngel

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This wall that stands
faithful with time
spoils the beauty
soils the sublime.
It stands majestic;
proudly unseen,
its presence felt like
a shrouded dream.
Obscurely it towers
over large and small,
Nothing else matters
but this damn wall.




------
I read your poems
rich and sweet
then lay roses at
your feet.

Char


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The following comments are for "This Wall"
by Char

"This Wall"
This is a great read char,gave it a 10...

( Posted by: Charmr [Member] On: July 4, 2004 )

Char help me understand
Char,

I have read and re read this poem, and I am moved by several of the meanings I get from it.

Just a question, as I see 'this wall, being ominous, affecting everything (as in major illness or physical or mental disability), I have a hard time relating to the word 'majestic'.

Am I missing something or is majestic as in a 'dictator'.

This piece has really set me thinking and I would love to know the authors meaning, because it is making my brain hurt. (That is a well deserved compliment).

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: July 4, 2004 )

this wall
i loved how the words, sentences and the whole meaning of the poem were contradicting. of course well written, i'd say that about all your poems

( Posted by: seniorme [Member] On: July 4, 2004 )

This Wall
I absolutely loved this poem. Your superior strength is twisting and weaving a tight cloth of words. You Char, are worthy of all the great things people are saying of your writing. Nice to see,.

( Posted by: Dareva [Member] On: July 4, 2004 )

Thanks everyone
I appreciate your wonderful comments and your taking the time to write them.

Ivor, to answer you question. The wall represents recurring issues we all must face in life. A bit like we all have our own crosses to bear. When I say it stands majestic I mean grandly although it is often ignored or unseen, it towers there and be that as it may, it looms over us, or in this case me, to run into when I become oblivious to its structure. Thanks for asking me. I am glad it made you think....although I do like to be concise, usually...I drifted from the path on this one intentionally to provoke thought.

( Posted by: Char [Member] On: July 4, 2004 )

About this wall
I liked the imagery here and I like the concept of The Wall, but I felt like this was only part of a poem. I'm sure there's more that can be said here so in that sense I felt shortchanged. What else about the wall? What does it "look" like other than majestic, which comes off as trite. I want more and I want it raw.

( Posted by: Odysseus [Member] On: July 5, 2004 )

Understood
wow I understood this poem so profoundly (at least from My own perspective, not necessarily how you may have intended lol)

now, to break it down piece by piece and unwrap those dreams and reach for the sky! ah yes!

wonderful poem!

( Posted by: SinamonAngel [Member] On: July 5, 2004 )

Walls...
Yes we all have them don't we? You are a remarkable writer.

( Posted by: catlesfemme [Member] On: July 15, 2004 )





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