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At play in fields of mines and trees.
to speak what is and what could be.


This world though hard remains unseen.
for what is true is but a dream.
as when one learns on wakening.
that dreams are spectres wandering.

So show your selves, of scant but air.
And let your dreams of want despair.
for pushing what you do with might.
you steal from those who have thier rights.

And push us straight from birth to death.
to ignore life and do our best.
though when the truth is seen as is.
you care for none but for what is.

you shout freedom when no-one's free.
none are ignored as much as we.
for years you've done you very "best"
gave us some and kept the rest.

when all is gone and all have left.
and all your dreams leave you bereft.
then will you see you ways of rot
and none will give your lives a thought.









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The following comments are for "masters of illusion."
by wally 5

Jack...Ivor
Jack,

This is good, your words speak for themselves, I don't have to comment.

An exceptional read,

Thank you,

Ivor

( Posted by: ivordavies [Member] On: June 27, 2004 )

illusions
Wally, it's good to read you again. I always enjoy your work, and this is no exception. Another wonderful read. As Pen mentioned, just a few typos. Otherwise, brilliantly written.
Reba

( Posted by: Reba [Member] On: August 3, 2004 )

Wally5-Unseen Illusions Masters!!!
Bravo great writing to you Wally5! I think this one is my favorite of all your many works!

( Posted by: unseenwriterx [Member] On: July 31, 2006 )

Master of Illusion, Wally5
A+

Wally5,
"when all is gone and all have left.
and all your dreams leave you bereft.
then will you see you ways of rot
and none will give your lives a thought"

In the end we will all be forgotten, and it has all been for not, all that is left is the rot.

I join unseenwriterx in saying that so far this is my favorite of all your poems. Good writing.

( Posted by: MountainBill [Member] On: July 31, 2006 )





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